The Shark Of Emptiness Comments

I loved this poem but there were some things I'd improve. The idea of the shark was great, I had this great image of it gnawing through the air. I think that section of the poem was referring to 9/11? I wasn't sure, it was mainly because of the crumbled buildings and such. Contraversial topic but delivered powerfully. The last verse was a little bit preaching (which is rich coming from a poet who spends his time writing poems containing little or no message at all) I would tone down on that. Otherwise brilliant. Loved it.

Now, this moment is running away from us, so seize the day, trust not the future, for it may not arrive. Nicely done Fred, I enjoyed it very much...the message is clear and so is your dictation. Stone

I'll drink to that! With humanity's seemingly inevitable tendency to self-destruct (and to take everything else with us in the process) , it's imperative to live for the moment. Or, as an old Joan Baez tune went: Yesterday's dead and tomorrow is blind, and I live one day at a time. Insightful poem.