Saturday, October 15, 2005

The River Erdre. Comments

Rating: 4.6

Then run along the riverside
upon a time a French King's pride
viewed vast breadth and gentle ripples;
glitter, glisten, glow and twinkle.
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Gillian.E. Shaw
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Ashraful Musaddeq 13 May 2009

Wonderful poem on a river.10++

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Egal Bohen 31 August 2006

A beautiful, refreshing, lush, sunlit poem, full of ripples, reflections, and yellow iris that creates an amazing image Gillian - gets more impressive every time I read it - thank you so much for writing it Egal..

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Duncan Wyllie 05 April 2006

Why do I feel as though I have just seen it and walked along its banks, when I have never been there? You have the poet’s gift of capturing the essence and allowing us to survey its beauty. Love Duncan

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Simon Whild 20 October 2005

A lovely poem that brings back my own memories of the River Erdre from some fifteen years ago. Well done!

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Egal Bohen 17 October 2005

Gillian, Thank you that's wonderful! What a beautiful picture of this bustling French River which I think flows seawards quite naturally. As a Francophile I hope a lot more of France will flow across these pages as the seasons change. You are in the right place to do it! Thank you very much. Egal Bohen...

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Raynette Eitel 15 October 2005

Gillian, this has really nice images and rhyme. However, the rhyme is not consistent and for me that causes a problem. Perhaps you think it needn't have a pattern. Your rhythm is so perfect and the stanzas that rhyme so well done, it seems a shame not to carry the pattern throughout the poem. Just a thought. Raynette

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