Tuesday, November 3, 2015

The Rain And The Exodus Comments

Rating: 4.9

The afternoon was excessively humid
The Earth seemed a seething hot furnace
Dark clouds were gathering overhead
Lightning drew fluorescent patterns in the sky
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Valsa George
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Roop Rekha Bhaskar 10 November 2015

I wondered about the title. It was when I read the lines where you witnessed another rain that I started to wonder even more. This is just so creative. I find your flow of thoughts so special. Your reflections are original and I just love to read when you word them so wonderfully. Thank you. these lines are really good They lay like scattered chaff after the corn has been stored Also some weak survivors, staggering to their end I thought, to what bleak fate, the exodus of insects Had taken off on wings for their maiden flight! I saw the porch strewn with filmy wings of the termites They lay like scattered chaff after the corn has been stored Also some weak survivors, staggering to their end I thought, to what bleak fate, the exodus of insects Had taken off on wings for their maiden flight!

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Akhtar Jawad 08 November 2015

Who can describe better than Valsa? Another beautiful description of nature! .....................

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Unwritten Soul 08 November 2015

the end verse Had taken off on wings for their maiden flight! made me fly enjoying the meaning :)

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Madathil Rajendran Nair 05 November 2015

It is not as tragic as we think. The insects (moths) have lived a fuller life than most stupid humans. And they did so with a purpose. Only we, who think we are intelligent, think otherwise. The dead insects had a scheme in God's great scheme. Again 10.

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 04 November 2015

Insects that seek fire have always been delight of poets. Swarm of these insects come and then complete their life cycle. Only the time is lengthened for others. Beautiful poem to read and learn.

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Kelly Kurt 03 November 2015

A marvellously written, vivdly descriptive poem, Valsa. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed it very much

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Kumarmani Mahakul 03 November 2015

The day was dying and I witnessed another rain The rain of insects into the sequestered freedom of the night Termites and white ants, sleeping in the hollows Suddenly emerged from their lairs in thousands........wonderfully penned the sight of rain and rain of insects. So wisely and aptly presented with gorgeous phraseology. Most captivating one though there is painful sight of insects at the end. Many thanks dear madam for sharing.....10

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Loke Kok Yee 03 November 2015

a simple occurrence so brilliantly and poetically described I'm lost for words-10+++ thanks Valsa

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Sanjukta Nag 03 November 2015

It's not just a picture, it's like watching a movie, and you made it so well. A very well composed poem on rain with a great poetic value. Beyond rating.

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Pijush Biswas 03 November 2015

Nicely described a frenzied atmosphere, and incsects being a matter of whole story well described the story. like this.

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Gangadharan Nair Pulingat 03 November 2015

The exodus of insects and lizard's acts and the rain situation very nicely written in this poem.

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M Asim Nehal 03 November 2015

During summer or winter when it rains the night fly appears from nowhere and enforce us to defend, nice poem on this subject, I liked it.

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