Wednesday, June 7, 2006

The Pitcher Comments

Rating: 3.5

At night under artificial light
A man walks slowly from the right
he comes toward a hill of clay
where workers have raked during the day
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michael brown
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Landrey 13 June 2006

definately your best yet! ! might want to change throught in stanza 5 line 3 to through. very engaging. nice work writing about what you know, it shows! ! -landrey

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Chardin, Ohio
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