Tuesday, May 15, 2012

The Pebble (Boink) .....[nature; Short; Humor; Birds] Comments

Rating: 3.6

For ten thousand years, on a lofty mountain ledge, the shiny pebble sat,
until this afternoon when a brazen raven.....dropped it squarely on my hat.
I guess I had it coming, as I planned to steal chicks from her nest.
Soooo...I decided I'd give up for now, ... and hike back home to rest.
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Bri Edwards
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Kim Barney 28 February 2024

I have actually been writing a poem about a raven, but ---NO! Now I think I shall change it to a CROW!

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Kim Barney 28 February 2024

Congratulations! This poem is definitely for the birds! ☺☺☺☺☺

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Bri Edwards 28 February 2024

TO MY POEMS READERS: Thanks for any comments left, but PLEASE SEND ME A MESSAGE TO MAKE ME AWARE OF YOUR INTEREST. OTHERWISE I MIGHT/MAY NEVER KNOW YOU HAVE VISITED. : ) BRI

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M. Asim Nehal 26 February 2024

At first I thought this stone was a precious diamond, but it turned out to be a rocket.5 ***** for this Poem.

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M. Asim Nehal 26 February 2024

Only if you are able to catch that Raven with your barren hands. I like this beautiful story in your poem, but where is the lesson? Bri : )

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Kim Barney 04 November 2024

Bri has no lessons, Asim. He hasn't learned any yet. : ) : ) : )

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Mj Lemon 24 December 2015

Wow! This is like Rodney Dangerfield meets Edgar Allan Poe.

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Bri Edwards 09 November 2024

Hey, Mark, you've mentioned one of my favorite comedians and one of my favorite authors! ! ! bri : )

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Wes Vogler 04 December 2015

Amazing ability to do scenarios'' I thought I did these exclusively.. but to write them down .. hmmmmmmm. After one month on this site I am just now discovering things about seemingly innocent and sane people. Beautifully executed bit of work Bri (Bri? I know that guy)

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Stephen Katona 17 May 2015

Another gem from the poetic wizard of wit. My only request would be to make it longer. I'd like to know more...was the intention to eat the chicks or give them a loving home? Perhaps you might return wearing a tin hat... Some dialogue between the two of you might be funny.

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John Brown 29 October 2012

Nicely written Bri. I enjoyed it. I think we all edit our poems to a greater or lesser degree. I edited one of mine, years after I'd written it, as I'd never been totally happy with one particular line. Mad innit?

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