The Pebble (Boink) .....[nature; Short; Humor; Birds] Poem by Bri Edwards
The Pebble (Boink) .....[nature; Short; Humor; Birds]
For ten thousand years, on a lofty mountain ledge, the shiny pebble sat,
until this afternoon when a brazen raven.....dropped it squarely on my hat.
I guess I had it coming, as I planned to steal chicks from her nest.
Soooo...I decided I'd give up for now, ... and hike back home to rest.
But, as I turned to walk away,
I turned to Raven and this did say:
“Raven I respect your concern,
but I had come ….. to ONLY learn.
I work for the university, and …
I’m writing about bird diversity.”
“So what? ”, croaked back the raven.
“This rocky outcrop is a our haven.
Go pedal your wares somewhere else,
or I’ll eat you up, as if you're a mouse! ”
Then the raven picked up another stone,
and prepared for it to be [at me] thrown.
“OK! I’m going, Raven, but may I say,
I’d like to talk to you again someday.
Perhaps when you’re not so busy with chicks?
You could tell me how to make a nest of sticks! ”
The raven’s feathers then got VERY ruffled.
What she said next [to me? ] was too muffled …
(by gusty winds) ….. for me to hear WELL, but…
I think she croaked VERY loudly: “GO TO HELL! ”
NOW, ....although I've forgiven the offending bird....[who's croaking now with glee],
I'll tweak her beak unmercifully.....if she drops, again, a stone on me!
So I thought a bit, and sure enough it did! I added the second stanza. I also added (Boink) to title. And tonight I changed 'bold' to 'brazen' and made some other minor changes. This is not the first time editing, sometimes long after the original writing, has 'improved' my poetry.
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and NOW [May 2015] years(?) after its debut, my poem has been read by PH's Stephen Katona, who thinks it could stand to have some 'dialogue/dialog', between me and the raven! ! ! very well.
so, STEVE, insert this as a 2nd,3rd,4th, and 5th stanza, making this a SIX-stanza poem:
Then, as I turned to walk away,
I turned to Raven and this did say:
“Raven I respect your concern,
but I had come ….. to only learn.
I work for the university, and …
I’m writing about bird diversity.”
“So what? ”, croaked back the raven.
“This rocky outcrop is a raven haven.
Go pedal your wares somewhere else,
or I’ll eat you up, as if you are a mouse! ”
Then the raven picked up another stone,
and prepared for it to be [at me] thrown.
“OK! I’m going, Raven, but may I say,
I’d like to talk to you again someday.
Perhaps when you’re not busy with chicks?
You could tell me how you make a nest of sticks! ”
The raven’s feathers then got VERY ruffled.
What she said next [to me? ] was too muffled …
(by gusty winds) ….. for me to hear WELL, but…
I think she croaked VERY loudly: “Go to Hell! ”
[of course i edited the new stanzas before inserting them AND had to edit the last stanza a bit as well. thanks a bunch, Steve, for making me work so hard! ! ! :) :) bri ]
Hey, Mark, you've mentioned one of my favorite comedians and one of my favorite authors! ! ! bri : )
Nicely written Bri. I enjoyed it. I think we all edit our poems to a greater or lesser degree. I edited one of mine, years after I'd written it, as I'd never been totally happy with one particular line. Mad innit?
I have actually been writing a poem about a raven, but ---NO! Now I think I shall change it to a CROW!
TO MY POEMS READERS: Thanks for any comments left, but PLEASE SEND ME A MESSAGE TO MAKE ME AWARE OF YOUR INTEREST. OTHERWISE I MIGHT/MAY NEVER KNOW YOU HAVE VISITED. : ) BRI
At first I thought this stone was a precious diamond, but it turned out to be a rocket.5 ***** for this Poem.
Only if you are able to catch that Raven with your barren hands. I like this beautiful story in your poem, but where is the lesson? Bri : )
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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7/22/2025 4:24:58 PM # 1.0.0
Amazing ability to do scenarios'' I thought I did these exclusively.. but to write them down .. hmmmmmmm. After one month on this site I am just now discovering things about seemingly innocent and sane people. Beautifully executed bit of work Bri (Bri? I know that guy)