Wednesday, April 7, 2010

The Pain Builds Comments

Rating: 4.0

black nails, black clothes, black infected heart
all he wants is a friend and a new fresh start
but everything he ever loved was destroyed and torn apart
hes disguised with fake smiles, he hides his true self in the dark
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Brandon Hoeg
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loNeLY AnGel 03 May 2010

snif snif... you got tears streaming down my eyes. .. nice poem..

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Mrs.Joseph =) 26 April 2010

great rhyme! I love your writing... you are such a great writer....

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Sherri Coulter 17 April 2010

I like the way you use rhyme...when reading it flows like a rap. I feel emotion-sad, lonely when i read this..

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Brandon Hoeg

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