The Pain Comments

What the did you just say about me, you little? I'll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I've been involved in numerous secret raids on Al-Quaeda, and I have over 300 confirmed kills. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I'm the top sniper in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another target. I will wipe you the out with precision the likes of which has never b\

dang gurl is that base on the true story couse if it is that is really wrong..i mean y would her dad do dat to her...pssh...some parents...hehheh..but yah anyhow i really love this poem..it really touches inside of me...so yah..take care much =-winneth-=143

We are all here to support you Crystal, and if it helps to write it all down, you just get it off your chest. A very good story of what life can deal us, you just hang in there, and stick out your chin, and lift yourself up, and go forward. Love Ernestine

Crystal, as i read your poem i think i feel all the pain you must have felt when you personally experienced it...lovely outpour of true feelings...

I agree with Mary it is good to be on this site it will help you cause we got a great site of good people on here that can help you through times like these. Great poem and I am sorry that you had to experience this.

Crstal, It is great to see the poem as story telling (have you ever read Aesop's Fables?) it isan art form that some on this site have attempted but their attempts have failed. It is not an easy thing to do. In this piece you suceed very much. A joy to read, but do take note of what Jerry says about spelling (and punctuation) . There are some real purists out there (me, for one) . Warmest regards Denis Joe

agree entirely with the sentiments expressed. One thing if I may? Watch the spelling, it can be a bit off-putting. Being dyslexic, I'm almost paranoid about spelling mistakes.

Crystal, I don't even know what to say to this! This is one of the most powerful poems I've read (and I'm not saying that cause you're my niece) . This is amazing! I'm so glad you're sharing your poems here........we are lucky. Sincerely, Mary

Wow, this is extremely profound for someone quite young. Sometimes the tale lagged because you had to find words that rhymed but, overall, this was an extremely touching poem with a memorable ending.