Wednesday, March 8, 2023

The One That Got Away Comments

Rating: 5.0

You know it's crazy, 'cause nights like this
Would start out with a little private party
You sneak me into your mom's house
I know I might spill my drink, but
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JayJay Maybank
mom
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2. While you wax eloquent in repeating a few lines, your talent (in penning real poetry) restricts your words. Brevity is a coveted quality in poetry.

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Love! Parting, albeit by swish of fate's hands. It is painful, crumbling. I could read the excruciating pain in your words, and that you are trying to come out of it. Poetry may help.

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