The Old Man Comments

A very well crafted piece with great imagination coupled with emotions makes it most outstanding.....Walter........ Thanks for sharing this poem

A refined poetic imagination, Walter. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.

You used the green butterfly to symbolize the soul. The spiritual butterfly is crawling with the body. Wonderful imagery. “Hopes are younger than solitude”. I liked the saying. Son is the light of hope to the father always that brings back strength and youth to the Old Man, Father. It's a beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it.

Walter, I like the ending and some of the images. Lines like In such a childish and lively manner are too talky, too much telling instead of showing. Do you read much contemporary poetry? Poets like Billy Collins and Mary Oliver could inspire and guide you. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Thanks. Yrs, JC