Saturday, May 20, 2017

The Old Deceased Sporting Legends Of Koroit Comments

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Though in the cemetery at Tower Hill their last remains lay
The old deceased sporting legends of Koroit are at rest today
In the memories of those who knew or knew of them they are living on
Though the last breath of life from them it has long gone
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Francis Duggan
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Jefferson Carter 20 May 2017

Francis, if you're going to write rhyming, formal poems, you need to know what you're doing. The best book for this is Poetic Meter & Poetic Form by Paul Fussell. You won't improve as a poet by writing the same awkward lines and forced rhymes over and over. If you'd like, check out my new webpage: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know what you think of it. YRs, JC

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