The Mysterious Life Of Ourselves Comments

This is exactly what I referred in, my earlier comment - your poetic mind in this poem has ordered all the amorphous energy under categories of images and the images contain the energy eloquently. This is a dance of potential. Only one thing and you can ignore this if you want. The poem goes on too long. You make your point with such vivid imagery for 20 + lines, our heads are spinning with these images - STOP - let us live with these images, process them, re-read the poem. Especially re-read the poem to strengthen the experience you've given us. IT'S VISIONARY.