The Mule! Comments

Helo Poet, no one could surpass you! ! ! ! As always thanks so much for all your attention. And as soon as I get home I will do the changes. (i think this time is right) . Kisses Poet.

P.M. i didn't roar with laughter as robert green did, BUT two or three parts of this poem caused my funny bone to tickle a bit. and in this case i mean my sense of humor (though that isn't the real way to use funny bone, i liked the sound of funny bone. don't you?) yes, i almost laughed. i certainly smiled! when i reached the ending i had to look back at the poem and think what was the mule right about? . oh yeah, the is he watching you or your car comment by the Mule (i didn't even miss the? , which wasn't there, my first time reading that part.) OH, i just notice something my friend. i THINK you meant to write my car where you wrote ME in the following section. and if that is the case, i also suggest changing it a bit more (see below) : parked my car in a wrong place and has a guard watching ME! ! ! - Oh really.... is he watching you or your car - Ah i don't understand your question. My car of course [my other suggestion: instead of is he watching you or your car, what do you think of using is he watching your car or YOU? ? ] i loved this poem and have added it to MyPoemList. it is a fine example of misunderstanding, forgetfulness, and suspicion which could have ended in a very unfortunate confrontation. it was good that the shopper has a good mood (though you wrote that you have a short fuse) . (isn't that what you say about yourself p.m.? that you have a good mood.) i especially enjoyed the parts in parentheses....funny and enlightening.....and the following: She make a strange gesture with her mouth. Up and down, from right to left, like a ruminant. And I thought: yes, really i have a mule right here in front of me. Trying to finish my day. But ruminants don't laugh... I took my things quickly and ran to the car. Thinking in how to exterminates mules in a quick way...... thanks for sharing. i may have found my match in the humor arena on poemhunter. could it be that you surpass me? nah! :) bri

Oh! Robert thanks but this was real! ! ! !

Roaring with laughter