The Moon And You Comments
You lie over heaps of sand,
hands within cheeks,
plunging into black wardrobe,
blinking eyes looking here and there,
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Lovely...well written i must give you that....girls are meant to be appreciated after all, in comparison to the moon, well expressed! ! ! !
having a twist and a turn in the poem is exciting... i wonder how you make it.. its a great and nice poem.. hope i can make a poem just like that..
Nice comparison :) Besides, the change... I mean the nature is described so beautifully :)
Brilliant! full of imagination. What a poet you are! Good one my friend; D
Leave alone the Girl! You know talking to Nature is so wonderful. I would lie on the Terrace, stretch my hands towards the dark sky and talk to God. Some times, I talk to plants. It's more of inner talking, unplugged outwardly. Talking, of course, when no one is present.
I stare above, ....................... Oh! What a spectacle! ....................... I wonder where you are! ............................... clouds feeling your gentle touch, playing game of hide and seek, ........................................ I look down, ................................. lying over heaps of sand, hands........ cheeks, blinking eyes looking here and there….. .................................. *A girl being compared to the moon! Rich imagination & good comparison essay.... I like most of it... Adnan,
Pretty. I don't any girl could resist being written in this way. The lines create a nice vision of the moon.The serenading and adoring mood works, either describing the moon or the girl. A treat in visual and mood creation.
I must confess, I did not understand your comparison, or even that it was a comparison at first. To contemplate a poem there must be enough understandable to help you taste the mysterious. This poem was comfusing. It was also beautiful. I like the repeated phrases very much. Their form gives the poem more substance. These lines are just right: heaven to here black to silver you appear so beautiful Write until this is child's play and you will be a true poet.
what a wonderful poem hope i can make one like yours so expressive : -)
Again a very brilliant poem your words placement is excellent you are a really great poet. Thanks for sharing and remember. Spread Yourself! ! ! !
The imagery you express is quite vivid, I also adore the usage of colours and metaphors in your poem.Thanks for sharing. A.
It is a romantic poem. Poets could see hdden beauty of moon.. thay talk to her.. sing to her.. good imagination....
wonderful visual metaphor: ''You are the queen of celestial system'' nice poem...10++
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8/10/2025 6:23:23 PM # 1.0.0
GREAT WRITE, CORRECT USE OF COMPARISM VERSES AND REPETITION