The Midnight Train- - - - A Pantoum Comments

A wonderful write. This poem offers us to look at the reality of life. Top score for this exceptionally well penned poem... stay blessed dear poetess! !

WoW! ! ! Thank you, Thank you, Thank you for such an uplifting comment, Smoky! ! ! !

This is wonderful, and incredibly good. I love trains, love stories of trains, and love poetry that rides the rails of life, and this one does it all superbly. What a vision... beautiful.

..Long and low the whistle comes seeking, winding through the long dark night ...I hear its call come burning through the miles, come yearning down the tracks ...Long and low it comes mourning, crying through the dark dark night ...The midnight train is coming, wailing and trailing its plaintive whistle again........touching expression with nice theme. It is really a brilliant poem relating to life that attracts me for second time.

Fabulous writing. Not only did the atmosphere of the poem live up to the mystery feeling of the title, but it also had the rhythmic feeling of a train. And he discipline of this form of poetry must have been incredibly hard to work within. This really is a masterful piece of writing.

Wow dearest poetess, this one's the kind of lovely poem that I adore a lot. In my view this is the doppler effect of the world we have and the one that we yearn for as we perceive it through external senses or our soul. A rare and beautiful composition.10+++++++++++ Regards, Subhas

beautiful Phantoum I learned from you mada do eRad me again poetme yeps poet

a poem of I heard the train a coming it's coming down the line it's whistle is blowing so it's time to make up your mind? ...................wonderfully express'ed Susan

The midnight train comes in restless dreams.....good feeling :)

What a splendid poem bringing out the sound, scene and feel of a train journey so vividly! ! There is a rhythm to it.The poem took me along with it.In the middle of our age how we yearn to be in safe station and also yearn to discover the unknown mysteries of life! ! To quote a few lines- Its secrets and its mysteries keep whispering in my restless dreams ...Calling me to go rambling and roaming and vagabonding or stay

Beautifully scribed and much enjoyed your pantoum poem. Repeating the lines brings home the message and develops intense emotion of yearning and indecision. The plaintive horn of the train that calls to the heart has always drawn me into dreams of adventure or riding along a the rails of some wonderous journey.

I commented on this Susan but it didn't take - after i wrote the comment it said i left my comment area blank.

i am thinking, if it is a train whistling, mourning, crying, passing, coming and coming from outside or poet the traveler of the train. haunting poem. very well written.

yeah when I came across this PHANTOUM style....I thought it was Phantom style... took some time to understand...wow its so simple lovely one Susan I failed first time

Get on that train! Nice use of this form and it evokes a mysterious air...perfect for the timing of your post. Again. I like that ending. How many times has that train passed the speaker by? It's time for that woman to give it a try! Anyways Susan, this is a lovely poem, well written and much enjoyed. Thanks!

This beautiful pantoum of yours took me to my childhood days when I used to roll on my bed listening to the distant wail of trains (we had steam engines in those days) on insolent rails. The east wind used to bring their cries with it. The train in your poem is our very life. We lie without sleep every night listening to its wails and cries recapitulating the past - the stations it had visited, the places it has traversed. A very great write indeed! (10)

Oh, I'm convinced by your pantoum eloquence to board the train and take my chances. But really I already feel at home on that train, I'm willing to take the risks for the pay-off of a life of untrammeled space and freedom. I can feel my sense of freedom swell inside because it's not so much a machine I am riding but some sleek and lithe mythical beast

Wow! ! ! ! ! Simply Out Of Sight! ! ! ! ! Fabulous Write! ! ! ! ! Feel And Hear The Train In The Hours Of Midnight! ! ! ! ! Hauntingly Calling! ! ! ! ! ! Absolutely Brilliant! ! ! So Perfectly Sung! ! ! ! ! And (Heart Feltingly) Done! ! ! ! ! Again Wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Could Go On And On! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! heh. Always Loved The Whistles Call! ! ! ! ! We Had A Train Running Near To Home Where I Grew Up...Wind Chimes, Crickets/Frogs, The Clickety Clack And That Whistle Used To Be The Way To Go Off To Sleep And Doze Off? ? ? ? ? Wondrous Dreams! ! ! ! ! :) Thank You Ever So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Hope/Pray All Is Well! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Blessings! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Smiles! ! ! ! ! ! ! !) Endles........10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++

Hi, Susan! First, I was glad to look you up and find a new posting by you. I suppose because of the train reference, I thought almost immediately of a favorite Bruce Cockburn song, All the Ways I Want You. Then the image of being called to somewhere unknown made me think of a poem of mine, In the Time Before New Year. But then it sunk in, a midnight train. Hmmm... Is the afterlife the yet-to-be-explored country? Still not sure, but I enjoyed boarding this train for a while. All the best to you. Glen

It has the same appeal to me as Johnny Cash's Fulson Prison. You know I can imagine him singing this. It is so lyrical with deep, mysterious longings. I love poetry that borders on song and this is a beauty.