The Melody Of You Comments

I took your advice Bri, I like it better now. Thanks.

thanks for your comments Hira.

good job..keep on :)

good advice Bri. Thanks.

in the following lines: Your inner light that glows Your body, emerald eyes that shows Your constant grace Your voice Your laugh and smile, a precious face The way you move, and move my heart you most certainly do, at such a fast pace! ......i would use a little more punctuation to separate phrases. i would drop the s off of shows (it will still rhyme well enough!) . i found the last line (above) to be tricky to read, and wonder if the way he/she moves, Or the way she/he does move my heart, OR both, goes at such a fast pace. thanks for sharing.