The Man On The Moon Comments
When the sun goes down
In the capital town
Some strange creatures lurk among shadows
One sits and he waits
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wonderful sarcastic piece and the rhymes are perfect. i love it.
We both now and groove to tunes by Kelly and Souren. It's amazing ow like-minded poets find each other at PH. It's not magic but it has te qualities of inevitabiity, astonishing ease, quicker than rational thought we associate with magic. Your poem makes a terrific impact and I found the density competely in sync wit your theme. A dispassionate narrator would not be believed; an orderly presentation would be counterproductive. We are rational beings living in an irrational world. You subtract te word rational and portray us as utterly clueless about our destiny and nature. You are a modern day PROPHET who is close to despair but wil not give up his mission of truth-telling. Your poem has te uncompromising, intense, courageous commitment of THE TWELVE by Alexandr Blok, about the insanity and violence of Bolshevik Revolution. They murdered him for writing /telling the truth! !
Thank you Daniel. I've always enjoyed your in depth commentaries. They add dimension to poems and increase their value. Flattered to receive one myself
Nope. Too complicated for a simple man. My thing is to translate old groaner jokes into limerick form.. So far I believe I am contributing entertainment. When they ignore me I will quit. I also flatter myself that I am able to instruct second language people as to how to correctly construct the limerick form. I'm sure you must realize that everyone is not going to be able to comprehend. your form of verse.
This one is a little dense. I'd probably be confused by it if I hadn't written it myself. I truly enjoy your limericks Wes. And I appreciate your feedback
A wonderful poem with a great theme, Mike. I really enjoyed reading. Thank you.
Thank you Ayman. Power breeds corruption and greed breeds mass poverty. At some point though, the error of our ways catches up to us
Not only an interesting write but an exceptional one. By way of answer read mine - We The Unencumbered - Adeline
Thank you Adeline. I did read your poem and I encourage anyone else seeing this to do so as well
Between the pleasant rhyme scheme, the imagery and the subject matter, this was not only an interesting poem but enjoyable to read. I'm glad Souren is a fan. He is a bright and insightful young man.
Thanks Kelly. And I couldn't agree with you more in regard to Souren
Just brilliant is all that I can about this poem.. Bravo Mike!
Thanks Souren. I worry that it may be a little hard to follow, since even as I wrote it I didn't know entirely where the story would lead. Your compliment is encouraging and your appreciation is noted. Thanks again
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7/18/2025 8:31:28 PM # 1.0.0
Fantastic poem Mike, This poem takes the reader through different stages of emotional quotients, An articulate writing.10++++ A War makes more money than peace...(Awesome)