I watch this lone bird
down the sky
hesitant to fly
folded wings, drawn in,
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A very thoughtful poem! .. So beautifully expressed! .. Endless 10'S And Stars! ..+++++++++++++++++++++
With that image of a lonely girl and the free birds around her, the poem clearly expresses the deep seated fear in the mind of the girl to step outside where there are plenty of preying birds waiting to take chance. She is weighed down and down by fear!
A very discerning and powerful poem. Brilliant thoughts that provoke the mind woven in a beautiful poem. Top marks!
Pity that girl..you have captured her mental state very well..last stanza is the highlight...kudos Kesav
Bravo Kersav I can see why you deserve a published book TFS
Loved the theme and the way this beautiful poem is written. Top score
Never give up. The next step might be the lightbulb.