Sunday, April 9, 2006

The Leaving Comments

Rating: 5.0

it would've been easier if you'd died
rather than know you're walking
talking, breathing
... breathing into the mouths of others
...
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Eila Mahima Jaipaul
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merc gabriell 10 April 2006

dear eila, another magnificent work. the passion ever present. this 'dark' poem is haunting. love love love the lines '...a blackness so profound/it becomes a tangible entity/a being, in its own right/...until a great howl is heard/and i break with the force of it'. the haunting absence of the beloved leaving a deep ache is eloquently captured here. take care.bless you. sincerely, merc

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Uriah Hamilton 09 April 2006

You're so right! ! sometimes, death would be easier!

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***** ********* 09 April 2006

Well you could put it that way Eila, but only in the privacy of your own home, in your bedrooms darkest despair! lol I shouldn't laugh, but I must! Thanks for sharing this, I think! lol It is true that once grief pierces you, you recognise it when it hits you again. Strong write. 10 from Strong woman! Apparently. Tai, not going anywhere! yet.

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