The Kiss Comments

Love and pain! ! ! Very common on earh. Nice work.

An absorbing read, Darlene. i wondered where this love story was taking us, did think of vampires just before the last stanza. Cleverly crafted, rhymes well. Well done.

His lips moved gently across cheek, jaw and neck His tongue shedding desire here and there with a fleck I swooned with the pleasure as he held me erect His lips spread more warmth to great effect.. very fine description of a human kiss and at the end. here i lie in coffin. all those worldly desires ends up oneday and do u believe in a life after? ? ?

Wow! I felt I was in the room! Thanks for sharing!

Kiss is the initial step of love.First kiss can never be forgotten as it brings thunder and storm throughout the body. Its magnetic effect can be realised throughout the life especially in situation when you are denied further. All I could think was how he would be in bed And now I lay in my coffin and know I am dead. FULL MARKS.

Kiss is the initial step of love.First kiss can never be forgotten as it brings thunder and storm throughout the body. Its magnetic effect can be realised throughout the life especially in situation when you are denied further. All I could think was how he would be in bed And now I lay in my coffin and know I am dead

WOW'... whether the kiss was with a fleck or with a flick, surly - it gave a good bit of kick! ! Warmth ran, blood rushed, ice melted and pulse had been burst...... The kiss was thus made a gold rush.... enjoyed your detailing.

Wow, your poem is breathtaking! This is one of the most vivid descriptions of a kiss that I have ever read. I was feeling warm until I came to the last stanza, where I got chilled! By the way, I liked reading your short biography too.

Amazing poem. Nice twist at the end. Very well done.