Wednesday, September 10, 2008

The Key Comments

Rating: 5.0

Lock me up and throw away the key
My heart's about to explode from this catastrophe
Oh, father, what have I done?
What haven't I done?
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Kesav Easwaran 21 September 2008

the request to get locked up is beautifully augmented by the two lines commencing with 'what i have done'...and the line 'i tried too hard' goes very well with the accusation 'you locked yourself up'...and why no grace on her? the decision on belated revelation comes in the ending lines...mind already loosing faith now opting out the same for once and all...excellent poem...mystic and explosive 10

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Sarwar Chowdhury 16 September 2008

well expressed pain....touchy...........10

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