It's good Roland, but you should let your image speak, rather than explain it. The poem, in my humble opinion, should have ended with the line, closing on the bright light. Instead, you explained your image with the tenth line, its final beam an invitation. The poem's entitled, The Invitation, so there's no need to delineate the poem's meaning- you've already done that. Remember the tried and true cliche regarding writing, especially poetry, Show don't tell. Overall, a good poem Roland- I enjoyed it.
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It's good Roland, but you should let your image speak, rather than explain it. The poem, in my humble opinion, should have ended with the line, closing on the bright light. Instead, you explained your image with the tenth line, its final beam an invitation. The poem's entitled, The Invitation, so there's no need to delineate the poem's meaning- you've already done that. Remember the tried and true cliche regarding writing, especially poetry, Show don't tell. Overall, a good poem Roland- I enjoyed it.