Tuesday, July 15, 2008

The Invisible Comments

Rating: 3.0

Ever wondered how it is to be unseen?
To pass one by one
And not even care
What you've done
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Jesse Mejia
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Greenwolfe 1962 25 July 2008

I cannot recommend this poem because it uses too many lines to say what could be said in a lot fewer. The rhythm is also disrupted be their use, This poem could be worked on a bit and it could possibly be improved a lot. GW62

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