The Innocents, Co-Writer Ron Dragano Comments

Enjoyed this insightful piece. It really made me think. Lovely work both of you.

Thanks for pointing me at this Scarlett....it is a Treat....: O) ...well done by the two of you...a great read

Oh, here I go with my two cents worth, I figured you for the last two stanzas for sure and was uncertain about the others, I feel you both did a superb job here on this marvelous write. I felt the poem was about a lost child, one that was not allowed to come into this world and if they made it through it was for an extremely short time. Now this child not allowed to live on this earth lives in spirit

I say: Miss Scarlett in the last three stranzas with her word processor.

Wow, you really touched a nerve with this one! It brings to my mind (though I know it's an intimate, personal poem) analyses I've read about American foreign policy, how much damage has sometimes been done, as in Vietnam, through what's been labelled as a kind of innocence or naivete'. (That's putting a less dark face on it than would some, I realize.) The relationship among three people, in which TWO who have loved innocently have been hurt, is indeed intriguing and powerfully suggested.

Everyone below has written wonderful analyses of this poem. Kudos for creating such a disturbing and intriguing poem, you two. -chuck

Interesting collaborative write, one of the best I've seen, More than one innocent here, stemming from inner anxiety of the subject, Though part seems to be in a softer veil works well.

Scarlet, This is such a sad poem. It sensitively juxtaposes the horrific imaginings of the 'innocent' child against a compassionate concern for the 'innocent' union that created that innocent. Again I hear a familiar angst in your words. Very moving and well written Oiseau Rouge. Love, Allie XX

A very intriguing piece.

Redboid, yer dun gud...

Scarlett, i've read this over quite a few times now, trying to figure out which ones are you & which are Ron's, at first i thought you were the early 3 stanzas, now i think you two may have alternated verses. um? powerful questions, i like the write.

The first thing that came into my mind as I was reading this was that it was about an abandoned child (perhaps even abortion?) . Of course, I think it is a very powerful poem which deals with the questions raised by loss - and such an enjoyable one that the specifics can be left up to the reader. I'm guessing the first stanza was Ron. Am I right? Hugs Anna xxx

Hi Scarlett, Having read it a second time It now makes better sense and I have enjoyed it even more. Thank you for shining a light on my confusion. Bless you. Love Ernestine XXX

An interesting poem on the subject of, I think, abandonment/loss of love - all the haunting why's. The reason for the collaboration is also interesting - I'll send you an email now.

Lots of questions here Scarlett, I'm not sure I can supply the answers though. This is quite a sad poem really without a happy ending. You and I, yes, but who is he? a past lover of I? Gee I'm getting myself confused and you too I quess. Actually I enjoyed it very much, I loved the many ways he dumped you. A very thoughtful poem. Love ernestine XXX

WELL DELIVERED WORK...SAD BUT VERY INTERESTING...GOOD STRUCTURE & CRISP RHYTHM...I LIKE IT SCARLETT, MYDEAR! ''''''''''''''''''''''''FRANK

This is such an interesting concept, can we tell which gender wrote what, good call Well I for one may have an incling sometimes, but in truth most of the time I just see words as words until I feel them, then they become universal, so being that the heart is genderless when seen at it's true value love duncan X

Well done Linda...I'm very impressed by this one! Hugs, Dee

This touched a part of me! Love the way you've expressed it with questions.... Preets