The Immortal Soul Comments

Tis all liberty unrestrained freshness-filled a seenless sight That fills this frame of flesh and bone with senses humble and meek And proves the life neither beginning nor end nor any waste of toil....do our duties as perfectly as possible. our reward is in heaven with the Almighty God. dont worry about death. go and live peacefully well. tony

got the salvation with thy motivation, hey! thee geared guy, wish to fly.

Good effort indeed. Though the genre and the kind of device used the lines triumph. But with the Miltonic pattern the syntactical concerns surface often and grammatical flaws entwine the thread of lines.. We should keep on carrying our duties....reward for life.

The poem is very creative, both in the use of language and in the development of the theme.10.

very spontaneous yet gentle....beautiful jobs on the words sir fabulous

a good piece of artistic expression........ alliteration is good but in sonnet we mainly focus on pattern and rhyming, must be carry the meaning with as structure progress. would be more better if these features were synced.......2ndly the topic is quite pregnant in nature, immortality of soul dare to be treated and you did........ good job