The Horizon Beyond Comments
It is depressing to witness a man mulcted of his self and succumbed to others' will
When neither has he lost his potential nor his potent standing.
Yet his ecstatic soul is constrained by earthly mortal thinking—
Of manacling free minds to the prevalent considerations still.
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Look up, not to the horizon above, but to the horizon beyond— That holy bond with God that the Devil wills you to abscond. I perfectly agree with the message with which you have concluded the poem. We are not supposed to labour to fit into the whims and expectations of others. Each one has his own individuality and mode of thinking. Don't just strain to hoard things to look big in the eyes of the world.
MORE: and i would be sure to qualify this if i ever said it: " your entire fate a sole action determines" maybe a " soul" action, but not that of a fish. hee-hee. i'm not religious, but i did like the last stanza for its poeticism, including rhyming. i esp. liked your use of " horizon above" and " horizon beyond" . bri " ;)
MORE: nought may also be spelled naught (which is the form i've seen before) . stanza 4: " ...it is the meaning of bliss To cast off pleasures, ..." I, Bri, shall hold onto my few pleasures and not expect bliss nor desire bliss. who would equate bliss with casting off pleasures, except an ascetic perhaps?
(cont.) 3 - i'll finish reading poem and may make more comments later. But the combination of my unfamiliarity with some words used, and PERHAPS some misuse by the author, AND my lack of time to spend on one poem [at the author's request] causes me to hurry to a stop for today at least. bri :)
(cont.) 2 - prevalent/prevalence (the state of being prevalent) which definition do you chose? ? : " Definition of prevalent 1 archaic: POWERFUL 2: being in ascendancy: DOMINANT 3: generally or widely accepted, practiced, or favored: WIDESPREAD" i've heard the word used in def.3 sense only i think. (cont.)
1 - re: " mulcted" , line 1: " i'm sure i've never heard of this word, and i don't think it is used correctly here. Neither do i think " succumbed" is used correctly. " mulct: FORMAL verb 1. extract money from (someone) by fine or taxation. i DON'T think you are using the word correctly. Also, I can never remember which verbs are called transitive and which are called intransitive. (cont.)
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9/6/2025 1:23:07 AM # 1.0.0
Live a life of spontaneity and act free in a way that will ensure peace and joy and seek God's will in everything. Sublime thoughts....! Seeing the comments below, I miss our friend Bri.....! !
Your inference is always intriguing to read. This poem can be considered the scion of Just a Pace Away and The Dungeon of Life. It substantiates the morals evinced by those both, with a hue of the Hallowed Hand (God) . Love reading your comments.