The Haunting Heist Comments

Alan, I added: A quiet tempest, A Rolling sea. Cascading Cannon, A stinging bee. What do you think? ? And thanks so much for the advice. :)

You woman love love, i supose that makes us different, men love logic you speak of love quite well, your poem is orderly it has a certain flow BUT IT NEEDS, a small explosion in the middle to bring it to life I cant tell you how to do that, it comes with time, you will have to be patient Warm regards AJS