Tuesday, September 11, 2007

**the Gunner And The Buttercup Comments

Rating: 2.3

Wind blown daffodils swayed in the breeze
of an eternal afternoon of breezy sighs
which swept her away to the
furthest reaches of her fantasies.
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Kesav Easwaran 13 August 2008

The words- blowing wind, swaying, breezing sighs all add attraction to the ‘sweeping’ action of the mind to the 'furthest corner of fantasy'...sighs- indicative of class room boredom? In the subsequent stanzas, your mind leads your fantasies very well down from your window- your class room constraint- to the fields- vast open freedom- Your fantasy picks up a mate from the ‘freedom fields’ and to end your boredom as told by the last stanza... i think this last part could have been real and no fantasy! Beautiful poem thinking of a 23 year old student...10/10

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