Saturday, July 26, 2008

The Golden Land Comments

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My daughter runs along the sand,
A golden kite string in her hand;
She calls and waves along the shore
Till I can’t see her anymore.
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Christine Natale
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John Tiong Chunghoo 26 July 2008

wow, there is much pathos in this little poem. i just wonder whether leaving 'anymore' in the first stanza will give it more effect. just my thought. good poem. keep it up christine.

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