Friday, January 9, 2009

The Gardener Comments

Rating: 4.5

Intent on her task, she gazes
at the earth, stooping.
Raking parched leaves, she scoops
them up with gloved hands,
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Allesandra Patti
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Polar Bear 09 January 2009

i like this alot, the tone is nice. when you say ' watch as she walks, see how she removes, ' causes one to try to visualize her actions, lots of imagery :) 'See how she turns her weathered face to the warming sun: a lover’s kiss.' is very sweet, as if we have walked in on a most intimate moment.

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