The Garden Sonnets For Elizaveta Comments

hey, daniel! just thinking about the fourth sonnet, the idea you express as night is my dear companion. it's not how i would have put it, naming night that way. i would say solitude instead, enjoying the quiet and knowing the God who is love, who cares, is near. in either image, though, is the common experience of wanting to be enfolded and sheltered for a time—or so it seems to me. -glen

Dear Daniel! Thank you so much! it is so touchy! the first sonnet made me shed a tear, amd inspired me to write you a poem outright. Tears, tears, tears. Roses, roses, roses. Thousands of seasons, Hidden God and promise. three Times in a row, Envy of an angel. and two souls grow: Souls of Liza-Daniel. May be we'll be others, but the same remaining, we will merge or rather we'll see living faces - Faces of each other, and One Face from which one all three Times are running knowing all but speechless.

Lovely poems for Liza! I can see the seriousness in all the characters and a great effort on your part to tackle and reinvent the sonnet...like Keats. These poetic forms are a challenge to write within, but I think you've done a great job of showing how a sonnet can advance for the purposes of modern language. The imagery of the garden is beautiful and intriguing and I enjoy the voices of the three different characters: Daniel, Elizaveta, and the Angel...all divine but at the same time imbued with humanity. The poem advances like a story as well as a philosophical vision of the garden, of faith, of life and death/dying. These sonnets contain both the secular and the spiritual. The garden as the first stage of heaven and made in the image of the creator is a joining of the secular and spriritual (a kind of personification/deification?) , showing how the two are both holy. There is something very attractive about a character who possesses absolute faith. I appreciate that you included reference to the Eucharist. Finally, I love the idea of bending time and knowing that you have already been there in the garden together....there are no edges.

dear Daniel, as I wrote in my email to you, Your composition is a 'trialogue' in 9 sonnets, with two human beings and an Angel.. but I'd say that the real subject is the 'Garden' - not the one in the Genesis, but that 'living garden' that we all have inside.. the sense of 'Beauty' as a 'sacred vision'.. and that gives us sort of eternal perspective - a real deception, but a sweet one.. ;)