Wednesday, March 1, 2006

The Fountain Comments

Rating: 3.9

the fountain railing holds back
the children from a pool of
water that has a siren's call
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John Kipling Lewis
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K Holoholo 06 November 2007

It's good but I think the words could use a little reworking.

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Kath Moore 05 November 2007

8. The first part is great. Sustain those concrete, original images. 'Mind's eye' is cliched.

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John Kipling Lewis

John Kipling Lewis

Manhattan, KS
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