The First Moon Comments

Really a heart touching poem..

The beauty of sensuality has been very well crafted in the poem. Simple words, but wonderful expressions.10 on 10 to 'The First Moon'...

Very interesting poem.

10+ by far this poem is your best.Everything is corresponding with beauty and emotions and sensations. You have really built up a lovely episode...Thanks for inviting.

You have well expressed the feelings through personification! Voted 10+

Well crafted. So much said without saying.

Kudakwashe Roak Mutama said it best it appealled to our imagination and had me begging for more. I wanted to know or better yet needed to know what was going to happen next. You are a great poet and this poem is a 10 hands down.

A romantic lyric, a lovely moon-lit 'Sexperience' Virgin lover's, first playful encounter 'Moans Sounded Soothing Music' 'Harmonious beats of two Hearts'/ 'Smilingly the moon slithered, The dawn embraced the night' Revealed; The Universal Romance of - 'Love's Omnipresence' Note; Your work, Preetam is well expressed Less rhyme to distract the poet's own 'Beat'. Sensitive readers may then listen with 'Heart' and join in the Spectacular Orgasm. (As 'eye' have) :) Note; My early writing were all Rhyme and Lyrical like. I was advised by another poet I greatly admired to express with prose, spontaneously. Many rhymes then self generated without a delayed thought as to what's best Good Work, Excellent Metaphor Keep Writing! ...louie

Its beautiful........ something different to read. Great flow of words............

a vivid description, really engaging. Throws the reader into the poem, which is the purpose of poetry. Good read, keep it up

this is nice and unique and very cool in images

images are painted in our minds all the way to the end of the poem......... i liked how you made it difficult for the reader to deduce that it's not just about 'the first moon' but about what happens at the time of the first moon.... well expressed! ! ! ! ! keep it up! ! ! ! ! !

it really appeals to our sense of imagination and visuals are painted in our minds all the way........... well expressed and well set ideas! ! ! ! ! ! ! a 10 with no doubt....

Nice poem. Kindly sing it out as a song or get a singer to do that, please. Thanks.

Loved the romantic flow of the write. The mood was truly captured, and felt. Very enjoyable read.

amazing imagery icould basicilly see it happening in my head and it painted a very passionate pictures its a 10/10.

Beautiful use of imagery here. Nice write. The dawn embraced the night. This is the best line in the poem.

it is a very passionate poem.. Gradually the earths slumbered, Inner souls began to unite, Smilingly the moon slithered, The dawn embraced the night. inner sould unite..... after the physical experience of passion. these words give the whole poem a heavenly touch. thank you for ur passion