Thursday, June 15, 2006

The Fight For Reality (Revised) Comments

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Puddles inconsistent with love everlasting,
Not knowing what I’m saying,
All means something.
Intensifying fear,
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Lori Boulard 15 June 2006

April, you have some very nice imagery here, especially the rain as wet thieves 'stealing pigment...a blood red soul now pink'. I tripped just a bit over the last couple of lines, which are more vague than the sharp pictures you paint earlier, but I enjoyed this overall. Looking forward to more from you. Cheers, Lori

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