Saturday, May 27, 2017

The Fallen Comments

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Her waves trembled,
Trembled with a kiss,
The kiss of breeze...
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Ami Joshi
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Jefferson Carter 27 May 2017

Ami, some nice images here though your ESL(?) issues weaken the poem (a drop of tear?) You should read lots of good contemporary poetry in English (Mary Oliver) if you want to improve as a poet. And what is a verse paragraph? Never heard of it. If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Yrs, JC

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