The Fallen Comments

Its quite an inspiration to reminisce the good old days of your youth, when old the memories lingers beyond imagination. Good write. top mark.

You're really talented for your age alot more talented then some older people I LOVE THIS POEM!

I see you're twenty. I think this is a good poem for a young man, is the only way I know how to say it. I hope you don't find that condescending. I think you have skill with language. Your narrative and description flow well, and I don't find any excess (unnecessary words or lines) . I think as far as the subject matter, at my age what you say is a given, but at your age, it's not, so much. The ending, also, would seem kind of obvious had I, at 57, written it. But again, for a young man, I think it works pretty well.