The Fall! Comments

A lovely penning of the factual in everybody's life. But right now it gives me a diff. impression that possibly in this way only we are handing over the baton to others (younger ones) . Now they will eat drink and booze and elders have to take a leave since commodities are limited..... nicely written

Oh dear, what a gloomy picture of old age, but its true I guess. I can certainly vouch for the aching joints and high BP. Made me chuckle anyway Shahzia.

Keep eating like this and you will be a new woman, remember that we must climb after the fall. Great write

its a medical doctrine madam...........

i guess i'm not old enough to be reflected accurately in this poem. but in the past 10 years i have had doctors prescribe drugs for both high blood pressure and high cholesterol. i took the pb med for a couple of years? and the cholesterol med for one DAY. at the urging of my new wife, and with the ok from my new doctor, AND with now-and-then self-monitoring of bp and annual cholesterol lab tests, AND with a bit of a change in diet and more exercise (especially walking) , i quit both meds and for several years have only taken some over-the-counter stuff......vit. B complex, flaxseed oil, and about 80 mg aspirin a day. oh yeah, the poem! i actually thought, while reading it, that i had read it some time ago. maybe i did and never commented on it. not bad, shahzia. i especially liked these two couplets: The diet comprises porridge and soup No favorite bits, no ice-cream scoop (any stanza containing ice-cream must be good; nice rhyme. before i got married again i used to have my freezer almost FULL of ice cream and eat some every day; now i only get a little, now and then) Less salt in meals, less sugar in tea To level sugar and high B.P (I like how you reversed the conditions in order to make the great rhyme.) AND this stanza: Just toasted bread with a chicken leg Pepper sprinkled boiled egg yummy! i thought i had surely commented on this stanza long ago. maybe in a message to S's inbox? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - as for this stanza's words: No thought of love, or hate or revenges But syrups, fruit-drops and lozenges another nice rhyme, if i give a different-than-usual pronunciation to lozenges. .........when one gets old enough, one can not DO love, even if one feels it. are you following me? ? hate may still be present, but what good does it do you? revenge gets more difficult when one can't even make it to the bathroom in time! Shahzia, i may send a personal message [my suggestions] another time. thanks for sharing.........i think! bri :)

Hi - Shahzia - read your poem once again. I feel very sorry for our loving life that alas, we all have to pass through this unagreeable phases before the end.... these are nothing but some pleas for dying (morneka bahana) .... very well written You can read my recent funny write Tick - tock, tick - tock

Growing old is inevitable..let us enjoy everything in balance, so much of anything is bad! In old age having good health we can make life livable and enjoyable!

but i prefer tea with black pepper ginger and basil leaf. have u enjoyed this cup of tea.

Boiled egg... yummy.... what more could somebody ask: p Nice poem....

No one can stop these ailments, sooner or a little late they will engulf for culmination, very well depicted. Shahzia I wrote a poem on the same aging, WHO CARES with a diff thought, you may read & comment.

Ah! Aging brings ailments in her pockets and the seasons that were once a source of delight turns aggravating old age sickness. It's a realistic write that paints such a true picture of aging factors.

Call of age cannot be escaped. You have nicely prescribed recipes for treatment. Thank you.

How well you have depicted the ailments of advancing age! With cholestrol levels going up and the heart panting while pumping the fuel... when joints ache with a sudden drop in the mercurial level.... what could be done other than imposing rigorous self discipline on diet and living habits as suggested by physicians! The perfect rhyning adds beauty to the poem! ! Enjoyed! !

True to life poetic picturrisation. Age takes it own toll particularly with pollution around us, food items having chemicalised growth and sedantry life style all contribute to life style ailments. Best way is to combat it is to take it on one's stride not allowing the ailments overpower mentally. These phases in one's life come and go. I do have a medical condition which I am combating with all my will power though medical procedures may be needed sooner or later. I too have jotted a poem ' Stone and Pain' I hope you to visit my page on PH.

true and realistic........

Sure nothing ever occurs to any reeling under such condition...

This fall is inevitable and like the yellow leaf that falls from the top of the tree it is natural. Life is a journey from birth to death and unlike the feel of tasting a cupful of ice cream, here towards the end we cannot help feel it a little bitter. An excellent poem!

Aapi, nice to see your new poem. Suffering people, who called by age, really know the beauty of the poem. Such routine problems due to old age and a little psyche... Well explained in poetic manner.