The Eyes {kyrielle} Comments

I naturally, didn't like this one that much. Your rhyme is still there but while you can end a verse anyway you choose. Remember, there is always someone who must read what you write. The last sounds of a verse echo through a poem. These lines must have a sound that the human ear finds pleasing. Unfortunately, your ending lines here do not. I still love your work. Greenwolfe 1962

This is very good. short but to the point. I like the simple rhyme and the idea it conveys. The power of a look........ Roger.x