The Eyes Have It- - -(A Tanka) Comments
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Wow! Mj, your observation gave me chills running up my spine... Lugosi and Chaney were terrifying in those movies... silence only made them more evil. Thank you for the 10, my friend! ! !
This is a very powerful verse, Susan. It catapulted me into a dreamland, flashes from old and silent films. I saw Lugosi and Chaney, their " eyes glittering with cold ice" . A perfect 10! !
another special moment has been captured by an expert poet to tell us how we can understanding the language of eyes without speaking, very fine way of expression,10++++++as usual and thanks for sharing with us
Soran, I cannot thank you enough for all the kindness and encouragement you have shown me and thank you for all the starry-eyed tens! ! ! !
A powerful piece that is so relevant to the world we live in. A world where fear rules. From a female's perspective, it is particularly significant. Her eyes begged for forgiveness.....an image that will linger in reader's mind. And i like the form of the poem too...and the fact that you were able to capture a vast theme in just five lines is certainly a feat. A sure 10.
Thank you- -it encourages me to read this. I wanted this to have impact even though the form of the poem is very restrictive in number of words and their placement. Thank you, Nosheen, I respect your comments because you have such an intelligent and graceful pen. And thank you for the ten!
I read this poem few days back. Couldn’t think of writing any thing for comment. Still can’t think of much accept trying to explore all the emotions that poem has touched. Marvelous!
Laughing here! ! Tis a fun thing to make a poet wordless! ! ! ! ! Thank you, dear Savita, for your delightful comment! !
Brilliant write, sinister, dark with the only light the cold menacing ice in his eyes!
Yes! ! I knew you would see into the dark heart of this poem... sinister and menacing
WoW! ! ! ! ! Thank you for wanting to read again and again. That is the best commendation a poet could receive.
Hi Susie, A fantastic picture in words drawn with incisive precision. Lovely tanka. A 100 for fitting this vividly colourful picture in the tanka format with magnificent brevity.😊
I have to admit I wasn't sure if I could convey a short story in a Tanka! ! ! Thank you, my friend, for your encouraging comment and for the 100! ! ! ! ! ! !
So meaningful Tanka is amazingly shared. Great work. Thanks for shasring here.10
Thabk you for the encouraging words, Kumarmani. They are much appreciated.
Thank you for reading and commenting! And all those lovely starry-eyed 10's
the eyes, insightful eyes penetrate the dark night, read the own inside, write the own heart for the next path........////
Mahtab, thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment in a poen
A chilling scene, extremely well directed with words that visually reproduce the pain, violence of which it is composed. My heart goes out to the victim, whose pain seems to overflow. Susan, always in your court.
Sandra, you are such an asset to PH both as a writer and as a reader. You delve deep into a poem's innards as well as its effects on the reader. We can learn so much from your comments and grow in our ability. Thank you, so much, my friend
Violence is as cold as ice. A poem that cools our hearts. Extremely well written, dear Susan.
I am pleased you liked this- I think I will experiment a bit with this style. Thank you so much for the encouraging reaction to this!
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Wonderful write... quite insightful dear poetess. Top score and to my favourite! !
Dr Dillip..... Thank you for appreciating this attempt to create an atmosphere of a short story in a terse few lines of poetry