The End Comments

'your leaden conversation', , , , , , , , , is the expression of the poem, , , besides love poems, reshma you have a pen for talking streight and real, , nice poetry, , , , ,10 plus

good presentation...cold toes/drowning- go very well...good simile like eyelid/ door...'end'ing also good 10

a profound, captivating write a bit of tinkering should make it finer. congrats, you're on the right road to becoming a good poet. regards, dr john celes

profound in thought.. an intense write..a sort of self tranformation happening here

Reads like a fuse going to a bomb that goes off in the end

Life is too short to be doing nothing, loving no one or letting someone hurt you! Meditate and spend life as a treasure to keep. Live the best in life that you can be and forget those that only hurts! High marks.