Tuesday, May 5, 2015

The Empress Of My Heart Comments

Rating: 4.8

If I wait by the well of water,
Then I could stand till the end of time.
For we are passed the age
When maidens go out at evening time to draw water,
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Akachukwu Lekwauwa
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A very powerful perspective my friend!

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Sara Militello 24 July 2016

Beautiful concept this: - Only today and forever remains for us, And to be a coward is no way to success Either in poetry, in war or in love! This poem of yours is so beautiful and contains so many human sentiments, I know I will read it over and over again. A wonderful effort. Thanks for sharing it.... and thanks for your comment on my poem. I don't seem to be able to get back places where comments made on one's own poetry are seen....

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Khairul Ahsan 25 June 2016

Just read this wonderful poem of yours, the first one posted here. The opening line speaks of the mastery you have over expressions- 'If I wait by the well of water, then I could stand till the end of time'.... There are other exceptionally good expressions too: 'Obscurely I might empty my treasure into her bare hands'... 'And to be a coward is no way to success Either in poetry, in war or in love! '... 'When she calls out to me With peculiar tenderness, Wave-notes of love fall on my ear'... A lovely love poem. Deserves 10/10.

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Lopamudra Mishra 16 August 2015

beautiful use of metaphors with a journey from past to present... good ink

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Kirby Wright 18 July 2015

I like her man riding on a camel. But I want the poet to avoid dangerous words like love and heart and soul because they are overused in love/beloved poems. I suggest the poet read some prose about relationships in works by James Joyce. He really hits it with his description of Stephen's attraction to the girl in PORTRAIT. Check it out and keep writing.

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Lovely lines that are loaded with love!

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Kofi Acquah 07 July 2015

So profound! Diction aptly chosen! Great piece!

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John Zeller 27 June 2015

Very powerful, I like your choice of words.

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Allotey Abossey 21 June 2015

I read it with smiles on my face....I can feel the mood of your writing.. This is beauuuutiful. I love it

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Ramesh Rai 21 June 2015

Love and war. Deep impression over poetry.

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Thanks Ramesh.

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Deep words, cloud by love. Great poem!

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Thanks Enyinwa for reading and commenting

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Phanice Wamukota 09 June 2015

I'm jealous. Who is the lucky empress? Hehe, Well put.

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Edward Kofi Louis 04 June 2015

The well of water. Great work!

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Thanks Edward for your comments on my poems

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Daniel Brick 27 May 2015

This is a brilliant ODE to a real woman of unreal allure. Yes, a woman's beauty can knock us men down! The beauty summons us, but the woman who embodies it does not. She often remains distant, cool, unattached - which can be maddening. But what can we do except be patient? And write ODES that reveal our admiration and make promises to her. The problem being - a beautiful woman has many admirers and they all praise her and make promises. But your poem is wonderful! You can be proud of the fact that those feelings inside you have been fully articulated and show the depth of your appreciation of feminine beauty.

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Khairul Ahsan 25 June 2016

Loved your wonderful comment, Daniel. Very well articulated.

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Queeny Gona 27 May 2015

Many similes are brought in to craft a beautiful muse of love!

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Thanks so much Queeny

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Akachukwu Lekwauwa 06 May 2015

Thanks Nedu, I feel encouraged. Be assured I have read your that and others by you

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Chinedu Dike 05 May 2015

Beautiful love poem, well articulated and nicely penned from the heart with conviction. A lovely piece of poetry written in poetic diction. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.

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