The Earth Was Heavy Comments
The earth was heavy, but the sun was light.
Through that which circled that the whole was bright.
Concealing no wonder what to the dark of night.
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It all circled round to that one star/How many points it had nor none could bar/Nor make of it what could another feature mar....fascinating expression! An elegant piece of work....................10
It does have a neat, almost bittersweet spiritual quality to it. Nice.
Thank you. I'm glad you picked up on the bittersweet spirituality. That's a perfect way of explaining the emotional abstraction.
Dear Julia, this poem centres Earth. Thank you for your support.
Incredible description, and I love both the philosophical and metaphysical elements within it- outstanding.
I'm glad you like the philosophical and metaphysical impact; that's what I was aiming for. Thanks!
In space Earth is a pinipoint of light. A reflection of light from the sun from afar.All around there is nothing where we are held by gravity. From nothing it began and to nothing it will go. A difficult but rewarding poem. The second line of the first stanza needs refining.
Thank you for your advice. I'll think about various arrangements that could make it better. I like that you call it 'a difficult but rewarding poem.' I think that's a good word for me- I am difficult; my poetry is difficult and its origin is from some strange and difficult challenges.
That sun was light; that earth was bright! The earth is bright due to the piercing rays of the sun. Without light earth would be in darkness. A metaphysical poem with the bright touch of philosophical light.
Thank you for the philosophical reflection on this poem…bringing the connection in the metaphysical.
Not split. Not naught by wit. Not what was wide or far. It all circled round to that one star. metaphysical and philosophical poem. very nice poem. light and the earth interacts in your poem. tony
Thank you. You also made me see where I can make a slight improvement. I am thinking it should be: Not what was wide NOR far (not Not what was wide OR far) What do you think? I appreciate your feedback and compliments.
A nice poem. Love the way you have spilled your thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
I like how you chose the word 'spilled' my thoughts as it is metaphysical and about how light (the sun) and objects (the earth) interact! Thank you for staying in tune with my poem!
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Your panache for the philosophical and metaphysical shine through. The celestial interplay is as mystical as it is mythical.
Thank you for your reading and you've understood it just like I would like it to be understood- about the metaphysical connections of these planets, earth and sun.