The Devils Snare And Love Comments

Dear Brittany, First, don't be too disheartened about Jeff's comments below; while he makes some good points, I think he fails to understand how a true poetic sensibility develops (your rhyming style reminds me of my early efforts) . As with anything in life the more you do it the better you become. At the moment you've got a scatter-gun approach which tends to dissipate before hitting whatever targets you want to hit; you've got to be more focused and order your ideas more logically but that will come if you do this one thing: Keep Writing! You show lots of promise! dsw

! ! ! ! ! Utterly superb in every way, a definite 10! It was like watching the movie as I saw you running away with tears in your eyes and then years later being confronted in the street by this scary, cruel, but irresistible past love.

very beautiful and artistic! i completely adore it!

Its a lovely piece of love detached.......a painful journey written beautifully! well done Britt.A+ and 10!