Friday, October 23, 2015

The Devil's Iphone Comments

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“You’re the Devil, ain’t ya, mister? ”

He grinned. “What gave me away? ”
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Souren Mondal 25 October 2015

This is really witty, innovative and awesome.. I had always had a thing for narrative poems, and this one was really engaging.. The poem indeed makes the reader think about the various interpretations that she or he can come up with.. And btw, by John 3-16 did you actually refer to the verses - For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life. I am not sure, but I guess you referred to it, and asked the reader to actually 'subvert' it.. So again, going for the 'apple' had made God angry on humanity? Techonological advances had taken the life out of us and had made us more of a follower of the Devil, i.e Satan (the heat from the Devil's touch made me think of that.. I'm not good at understanding the difference between Satan and Devil) ... Either ways this is a really powerful poem that makes the reader think a lot.. P: S: And as far as apple is concerned, I guess it has always had it's association with the 'original sin', particularly with it's autocorrects, isn't it? ? ;)

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Brian Mayo 26 October 2015

Hi Souren. Thanks for the nice comments. About the bible verse- -no, I didn't look it up, it's pretty well-known, so the second I decided to use verse that was the first thing that popped into my head, and I saw the beauty of it immediately. There's probably a better verse I could've used, but I never even considered one. Yes, the bit about the Apple fit so well that I have to wonder if maybe I'm the last one on Earth to see the connection between the Apple Logo and the story of Eden and the snake. Why didn't I make this connection until writing the story? Just how dense am I? lol Very glad you liked my story.

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Pamela Sinicrope 24 October 2015

So...I liked this story. I read it last night and it stuck. Strangely enough, it brings to mind that old country song, The Devil Went Down to Georgia, or something like that...do you know it? Very creative! Love this story and the screwed up Iphone.

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