Monday, June 30, 2008

The Day We Said Goodbye Comments

Rating: 4.0

One day everything was fine
Then the clouds covered the sunshine
One moment we were loud and smiling
Then I have nothing,
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Colin Jeffery 17 July 2008

I think you are a poet of merit.

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Greenwolfe 1962 09 July 2008

Tomorrow and yesterday we say the words. Today, we only regret. GW62

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Bonnie Collins 01 July 2008

This has very good potential, very good, however the ending doesnt seem to flow well with the structure of its intent.... Good job.... Bonnie

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Rebekah Gamble 30 June 2008

The emotion in this is very strong, and I like that, but I'm having trouble connecting the thoughts in this piece. It's like it doesn't flow right to me. Nevertheless, I like this piece quite a bit.

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