...The Dawn Calls... Comments

Life is busy always. Few moments of relaxation help. Nice poem.

“dips here, gonna rise, somewhere else” enjoyed reading...i like it......

Enjoyed your words that you have shared with us. May everything go well for you, keep smiling x

Hope you were not disappointed at the end of your appointments yesterday..... As poetry is the luxury of an idle mind too, you are rejoicing here Shahziaji and have it this way.... Anyways kudos for the new format of speaking out the minds of diametrically polar entities.

mmmmm actually a good theme is treated hastily, missing pronouns work but too much inverted commas spoil the flow, 2nd while using iamb let the rhythm make her way, you have chopped the music and made it more prosaic rather poetry, (prose is poetic too) here you should use more metaphors and similes caz the the subject demand so, sometimes plain diction does carry the boat but figurative expression has its charm(whose know better than you) ya trying to turn your feelings and words into strong vivid images, that could print on the minds of readers. p.s. i will come to it later again for further reading

Wish you good luck. All the best with sweet dawn of every life.

Marvelous! Let me die in chores! Need to do my grocery! wish me luck!