Tuesday, July 15, 2008

The Darkness Comments

Rating: 2.0

Have you ever noticed,
darkness is the single thing most fear?
when lights depart it fills its place
and makes me hold you near.
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Jesse Mejia
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Greenwolfe 1962 25 July 2008

I gave this poem a seven because it did have as rhyme scheme that was followed. There are some poems that start out well be finish poorly. I thought this one ended quite well. There are mistales and I didn't think te rhythm was very distinctive or made it worthy of recommendation,

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Shutter Queen 25 July 2008

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