The Colour Bow Comments

Subhash, I have to agree with Denis on this one, the third stanza weakens the poem, you might consider a re-write of it, or perhaps losing it altogether. On the first two stanzas, I love the softness of the language, and the thought of conquering the world of colors with an arrow of ’evergreen love’. There is a delicacy about it that seems intrinsic in your writing. -Eila

this is a beautiful poem... narrated from the perspective of a child lends innocence... Asma...

I liked this Niranjan, with the exception of the third stanza, which I thought was trite. The use of a paternal figure is well presented here and, overall, this is a lovely write.

trying to conquer the world of colors is beautiful.afterall what is left with love is only wounds in the end..........