Saturday, August 21, 2010

The Cliff Comments

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I'm hanging on but only barely
My fingers are bleeding and sore
I'm gripping and slipping but every grips missing
My clothes are tattered and torn
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Lauren Kjar
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Adeline Foster 15 November 2012

You have the feel of a true poet. I like the way you work the rhymes without having to contrive them. Punctuation can be problematic, commas can get lost in passage. Good job. Read mine - We The Unencumbered - Adeline

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