The Carnival Comments

I enjoy this work, like many of your others, because of its unpretentiousness. there is always a great scene carefully shown with deep inner beauty and majesty. wonderful piece, Jeff. -Tailor

I liked it better before the edits. The use of the word 'uninhibited' I think trips up the flow. Now it colors what you'd like to do behind the grease paint. Before it was left to our imagination why you'd like to disappear. That said, what a wonderful poem. I know of no one who can capture a moment liek this. What a wonderful night. You need to write more. You are my favorite poet. It's been a week and...nothing. You know who you are. Write.